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A   In my opinion, I am agreement on music therapy is a good method for health. For instance, I have heard that doctor often advices people to hear some gentler music to keep gently. That makes a good environment to help people to ease anxiety, and helps sick cure quick.

: In my opinion, I agree that music therapy is a good method for health. For instance, I have heard that a doctor often advise people to listen to some gentler music to keep gently. That is because it keeps them calm. This makes a good environment to help people with easing anxiety, and helping cure sicknesses quicker.

B  In conclusion, we can get different messages from the music. For instance, when we feel the stress of getting too much work to deal with, we can use the music to relax ourselves. On the other hand, we can also use music to keep our bodies to stay healthy. To me, music is a magic tool to help us managing our mind.

: In conclusion, we can get different messages from the music. For instance, when we feel the stress of getting too much work to deal with, we can use the music for relax. On the other hand, we can also use music to keep our bodies to stay healthy. In my case, music is a magic tool for managing our mind.

C  Music has many powerful ways to effects our body and mind. It relaxes our body and prevents the harmful effects of chronic stress. Now, we can think about music therapy and other benefits of it without wondering, and believe that music is a good tool for health.

   

   : Music has many powerful ways to effects our bodies and mind. It relaxes our bodies and prevents the harmful effects of chronic stress. Now, we can think about music therapy and other benefits of it without wondering. Therefore, I believe that music is a good tool for health.

Bp#9- Reflection on HELA

      If my tissue and cells remove because of research without my agreement, I might be retroactively compensated. But, on the other hand, if my tissue and cells make greater good of humanity, I will do my best. I think ‘medical research’ it sounds likes strange and makes me afraid but I will consider working with them. That is because I believe that the research would give many advantages.

BP #8 going green again~

Do you think that people in your home country think about going green as much as Americans do?

           I think most American is not doing as much as they think environment. It is just my view. ^^ that is because, every day, American let out that we have to take care environment, our place, nature. However, I do not think that they are not enough think for take care it. Even they do not doing something, I think. When I arrived first time, I was really shocked. Because, in our country, we always say that we have to follow the example of America. I think even America work hard for take care environment, but if nations do not well and not follow the intention of the deceased, I cannot say American is working hard for take care environment.

I think most Koreans think about going green as much as Americans do. We already do a lot of things. For example, we do very well recycling, and we have to use officially approved vinyl trash bag when we throw trash. And when people finish smoking they usually throw cigar, gum whenever they want. But we do not do it because if someone does, it they pay penalty a lot. Also, most Korean participated to reduce carbon footprint. In summer, we maintain temperature at a reasonable level. When we turn air-conditioner, we have to set 26'c

Also, we have automobile day system. Because of drives the automobile and the contamination of the atmosphere in order for the people who comes and goes to be many, so this automobile day system reduce air pollution. This automobile day system attaches and the electronic tag only the vehicle which observes a fortune holiday will be able to use government. To intrinsic value time the automobile the rest needs. Air and clearly, traffic difficulty it is solved and, until oil price anxiety the passenger car day system to take, Seoul to be clearer it is a short cut which it does cleanly. Besides, we do many other things. So I think, Korean is as much as think environment.